You have just started a course in a college which has no sports facilities of its own. Write a letter to the manager of the nearest private sports club. In your letter Introduce yourself Say why you are interested in this club Ask some questions about the club e.g facilities, members, costs.

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Dear Sir or Madam My name is Mehribon and I study at Cambridge

college

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College

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.I am writing

this

letter to express my interest in joining your

sports

club. I am a

sports

person and I do sport every day .

Moreover

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sports

are beneficial

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to my

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health and it keeps me fit.Unfortunately ,our college does not have

sports

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a sports

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club .I saw an advertisement

your

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for your

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sports

club and your location is near my college. I would like to get more information.

Firstly

,I would like to know how big

gym

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the gym

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area

and

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is and

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what types of equipment are available .

Secondly

, I would be grateful if you could tell me about the facilities. How many people

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are at

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your place and how much does it cost? I would appreciate it if you could send the details to my email. I hope you will consider my request. I would like to hear from you soon. Yours faithfully Mehribon

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Ensure that the letter has a clear introduction, body, and conclusion. Each paragraph should focus on a single topic.

task achievement

When introducing each question or point of interest about the club, it would help to provide a little more context or detail to show genuine interest and research.

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Maintain a consistent and respectful tone throughout the letter.

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4Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Grammar mistakes
 

8 paragraphs

151 words

5.50

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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Nowadays more and more people are buying products and services on credit. Is it good or bad for the society?

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