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You have just started a course in a college which has no facilities of its own. Write a letter to the manager of the nearest private sport club

#course #college #facilities #manager #sport #club
Dear Sir or Madam I am writing to request your private
sport
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sports
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club
. I am enrolled on the
sport
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sports
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 course at
collage
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college
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, which has no facilities of its own.
However
,
due to
 unforeseen
course
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courses
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 at the college, I have had to
enroll
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enrol
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on the
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the
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a
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 private
sport
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sports
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club
 for a
while
 to my health and become a bodybuilder. I am interested in your private
sport
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club
.
Becouse
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Because
 it has
a
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apply
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many benefits , conveniences and its nearest private
sport
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sports
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club
 to me. I would like to
request
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ask
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 some questions about
facilities
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the facilities
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 of the private
sport
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sports
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club
 and how much
its
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it
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 costs
of
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for
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week
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a week
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, month or a year. I would be grateful if you could give me
hand
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a hand
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 to my enrolment. I am
expecting
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expecting to
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 receive to your private
sport
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sports
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club
. I apologise for the short notice and for any
inconveniences
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inconvenience
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coused
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caused
. Thank you in advance for your help and I hope to be able to update you on the situation soon.
Your
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Yours
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 faithfully Akrom
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coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph contains a distinct topic or idea to improve organization within your letter. Use a clear introductory paragraph, follow with a main body of multiple paragraphs that each address one point, and finish with a concluding paragraph.
coherence cohesion
Use a range of linking words and phrases to connect ideas and sentences, making your letter flow more naturally and improve overall coherence.
task achievement
Address all aspects of the task prompt. Specifically, ensure you make clear, direct requests regarding the information you need about the sport club, such as facilities and costs, and any particular requirements you have due to your course.
task achievement
Check for grammatical errors and include a range of sentence structures to create a more sophisticated response.
task achievement
Maintain a formal tone throughout the letter appropriate for writing to a manager, which you have done well, but ensure to use correct spelling of words like 'college' and 'because' to maintain this formality.

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