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You have just started a course in a college which has no sports facilities of its own. Write a letter to the manage of the manager of the nearest private sports club. In your letter. •introduce yourself •say why you are interested in this sports club •ask some questions about the club e.g. facilities, members, costs

#course #college #sports #facilities #manage #manager #club #•introduce #•say #•ask #questions #e #g #members #costs
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Dear Sir or
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Madam
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 My name is Sarvinoz.I am an 11th grade student.I study at a school near your
sports
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club
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.I am 16 years old. The main reason I am contacting you is that our school does not have a
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club
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. But I have to do yoga regularly.because I am very interested in
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.I need to participate in the competition soon.
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, my efforts of so many years will come to nothing. I have a few questions for you. Are conditions good at your
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? what is the relationship between
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 members
.
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 Unexpected events do not happen. Yes, the main thing I wanted to ask about the costsAren't the costs expensive? The reason I am asking is that I am
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 taking various courses. so it can be valuable to me. How long will your
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club
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 be open?
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Greeting and Closing
Ensure you begin with an appropriate greeting and sign off with a suitable closing statement to make your letter more formal and polite.
Logical Structure
Maintain a logical order in your paragraphs, each focusing on a single aspect of your query and avoiding mixing different questions within the same paragraph.
Single Idea per Paragraph
Make sure each paragraph has a clear central idea, and use cohesive devices to link your sentences and ideas smoothly.
Complete Response
Address all parts of the task, provide a full explanation of your situation and reasons for writing, and give enough detail about the necessary club information you are seeking.
Suitable Writing Tone
Adopt a consistent and suitable tone for formal letter-writing throughout your text. Avoid using overly casual language or expressions which could be seen as informal.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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