You have just started a course in a college which has no facilities of its own. Write a letter to the manager of private sports club. In your letter Introduce yourself Say why you are interested in this sportc centre Ask some questions about the club e.g. facilities,members,cost

Dear Sir or Madam I hope that you find
this
letter in good health. My name is Shodiyona and I am 16 years old. I want to
enrolled
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enrol
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on
sports
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a sports
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center
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centre
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when I
started
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in
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apply
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a
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apply
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college.
However
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college is so old-fashioned and no
sports
club. I don't want to study
in
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there but I am studying unwillingly because of my parents. One day I was walking along the road with my dog. I saw
this
sports
centre. Do you have
karate
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a karate
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course in your centre? I am keen on karate.
By reason
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of
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apply
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I used to be
karate
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a karate
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girl before. After
that
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that,
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I and my family moved
another
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to another
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city
that
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where
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I stopped
sport
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sports
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.
However
, perhaps in
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the morninv
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morninv
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morning
mourning
or evening when I have
a
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apply
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leisure time
that
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apply
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I
do
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work
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workout for my health and perfect body.
Still
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It still
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workout
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works
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so difficult
to
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for
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me I have no idea why. So I want to
off
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go to
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the gym and I found your
sports
center. I would be grateful
whether
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if
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yoh
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you
could tell me what the price is
in addition
to I would like to know more about
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the center
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center
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centre
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. If you could possibly send me
message
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a message
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. Thank you in advance
dear
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Sir or Madam. Yours faithfully, Shodiyona
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coherence cohesion
Your letter should have a clear introduction, one or more body paragraphs, each with a single main idea, and a concise conclusion. Each paragraph should have a clear purpose and connect smoothly to the others.
coherence cohesion
Make sure to use an appropriate greeting and closing. You have done well with the closing, but consider using a more formal greeting such as 'Dear [Name of Manager]' if known, or 'Dear Manager' to make it more suitable for formal correspondence.
task achievement
Address each point of the task separately, ideally in its own paragraph. You should introduce yourself, explain why you're interested in the sports center, and then ask questions about the club's facilities, members, and costs. This structure helps ensure that you fully cover the task requirements.
task achievement
A suitable tone for formal writing should be maintained throughout the letter. Avoid overly casual language and keep the focus professional. This includes avoiding contractions, casual expressions, and maintaining a level of formality in line with writing to someone you have not met before.

Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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