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Write to the company. In your letter •Describe what you purchased •Explain why you are not happy with the purchase •Tell them what you would like them to do about the situation

#company #•describe #•explain #purchase #•tell #situation
Dear Sir, I am writing
this
 letter to express my deep grievances on the service that was provided by your company.
Few
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 days ago , I
have
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apply
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ordered
online
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an online
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 Ninja food processor and microwave, both
give
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gave
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 me trouble and not
working
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work
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 appropriately. I
have seen
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saw
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 an advertisement in the newspaper a few days before which was published by you and assured everyone to get
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% discount on every electronic
items
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.
Thus
, I ordered these two products because the deal
seems
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 to be super amazing,
however
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however,
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 I got the delivery super late . My
overall
 experience was very bad and I feel disappointed . Anyway, when I was trying to operate them both failed at the same time and there are
few
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 scratches on
it
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them
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. I want you to refund my money or you can replace it with brand new items which will work accurately and save
my
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me
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 energy and time. I am looking forward to hearing from you .
Yoursa
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Yours
 faithfully, Sam
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Coherence & Cohesion
Ensure a clear introduction, body, and conclusion structure is followed to enhance logical structure and coherence.
Coherence & Cohesion
Use separate paragraphs to discuss separate ideas; one for the product description, one for the issue, and one for the resolution.
Coherence & Cohesion
Open your letter with a proper greeting (e.g., 'Dear [Company Name] Team,') and close it appropriately (e.g., 'Yours sincerely, [Your Full Name]').
Task Achievement
Fully address all three bullet points with detailed information. Clarify what specific aspects of the product are unsatisfactory and why.
Task Achievement
Maintain a polite and professional tone throughout the letter, being assertive but not overly aggressive or emotional.
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