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Band 4.5

Your recently attended a training course for your work. Your employer has asked you for your feedback on the training course. - Write a letter to your employer. In your letter - Remind your employer what the course was about - Explain why the course was useful to you in your work - Suggest why the course may not be suitable for some of your other colleagues.

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Dear
menager
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manager
, I am writing to you because
,
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 I need to give some feedback
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that
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the
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wine tasting
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wine-tasting
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course
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. As we talked
,
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about, wine
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wine
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the
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 tasting
course
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 is very important
our
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wine
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 company because in
this
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course
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,
it
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I
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learned
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 a lot of things about
wine
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 varieties. In
this
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course
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, we taste a lot of
wine
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 from different
country
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countries
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.
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, my
favorite
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wine
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 is Loquresa
Wine
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 from Spain. It is a sweet and heavy
wine
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, It was amazing. I take some different
wine
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 samples for our company, It can be
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with
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to
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 us. Maybe we will try
new
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a new
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 product when I work start again. Meanwhile, If we sent
another workers
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, we
mıght
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might
 have some problems.
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, some wines were
alargen
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allergen
. But do not worry, I did not have a problem.
To sum up
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,
this
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course
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 was really good. I learned a lot of things, we can improve our company about
wine
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. I prepared a presentation about what I learned. I
wıll
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will
 show you when I come. Kind regards, Kağan

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greeting and closing
Ensure the introduction sets a clear context for the letter and addresses the manager formally. The greeting should be 'Dear Manager,' or 'Dear [Name]' if the manager's name is known.
single idea per paragraph
Keep each paragraph focused on a single idea. The first paragraph should introduce the purpose of the letter; the second should describe the usefulness of the course; and the third should discuss why it may not be suitable for others.
task achievement
Develop your ideas more fully. You mentioned that the course was useful for understanding wine varieties but did not explain how this applies to your work. Elaborate on the benefits of your new knowledge in the context of your job.
logical structure
Your letter must be coherent. Use connecting words and phrases to link sentences and paragraphs. This will make your ideas clearer and the overall structure of the letter more logical.
coherence cohesion
Using more sophisticated language and a variety of sentence structures can enhance the quality of your letter. Avoid repetition and strive for clear and precise expression.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Training program
  • Skill enhancement
  • Job responsibilities
  • Practical exercises
  • Hands-on experience
  • Operational efficiency
  • Subject matter
  • Prerequisites
  • Specialized knowledge
  • Teaching methodology
  • Learning preferences
  • Feedback
  • Course facilitator
  • Professional development
  • Engagement
  • Interactive components
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