Your recently attended a training course for your work. Your employer has asked you for your feedback on the training course. - Write a letter to your employer. In your letter - Remind your employer what the course was about - Explain why the course was useful to you in your work - Suggest why the course may not be suitable for some of your other colleagues.
Dear
menager
,
I am writing to you becauseCorrect your spelling
manager
,
I need to give some feedback Remove the comma
apply
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on that
that
Correct determiner usage
the
wine tasting
Add a hyphen
wine-tasting
course
. As we talked,
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about, wine
wine
tasting Correct your spelling
the
course
is very important our
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to our
wine
company because in this
course
, it
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I
learned
a lot of things about Verb problem
taught
wine
varieties.
In this
course
, we taste a lot of wine
from different country
. Fix the agreement mistake
countries
For instance
, my favorite
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favourite
wine
is Loquresa Wine
from Spain. It is a sweet and heavy wine
, It was amazing. I take some different wine
samples for our company, It can be help
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helpful
with
us. Maybe we will try Change preposition
to
new
product when I work start again.
Meanwhile, If we sent Add an article
a new
another workers
, we Replace the adjective
another worker
other workers
mıght
have some problems. Correct your spelling
might
For example
, some wines were alargen
. But do not worry, I did not have a problem.
Correct your spelling
allergen
To sum up
, this
course
was really good. I learned a lot of things, we can improve our company about wine
. I prepared a presentation about what I learned. I wıll
show you when I come.
Kind regards,
KağanCorrect your spelling
will
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greeting and closing
Ensure the introduction sets a clear context for the letter and addresses the manager formally. The greeting should be 'Dear Manager,' or 'Dear [Name]' if the manager's name is known.
single idea per paragraph
Keep each paragraph focused on a single idea. The first paragraph should introduce the purpose of the letter; the second should describe the usefulness of the course; and the third should discuss why it may not be suitable for others.
task achievement
Develop your ideas more fully. You mentioned that the course was useful for understanding wine varieties but did not explain how this applies to your work. Elaborate on the benefits of your new knowledge in the context of your job.
logical structure
Your letter must be coherent. Use connecting words and phrases to link sentences and paragraphs. This will make your ideas clearer and the overall structure of the letter more logical.
coherence cohesion
Using more sophisticated language and a variety of sentence structures can enhance the quality of your letter. Avoid repetition and strive for clear and precise expression.