The graph below shows th consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in European country between 1979 and 2004 .
The line graph illustrates the European
indevesuals
consumption of fish, beef, lamb and chicken from 1979 to 2004 .
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individuals
overall
, Linking Words
while
beef, Linking Words
lamb
were Correct word choice
and lamb
decresing
chicken Correct your spelling
decreasing
shows
Wrong verb form
showed
a
increasing .
In 1979 beef Change the article
an
were
around 220 Change the verb form
was
grams
and increased Use synonyms
slitly
Correct your spelling
slightly
upword
to 245 Correct your spelling
up
aproxematly
, Correct your spelling
approximately
then
it Linking Words
start
to Wrong verb form
started
fell
down constently at 110 Wrong verb form
fall
grams
Use synonyms
aproxematly
. lamb shows a similar trend starting from 150 Correct your spelling
approximately
grams
to 60 Use synonyms
grams
.
chicken Use synonyms
were
just below 150 Change the verb form
was
then
it Linking Words
incresed
Correct your spelling
increased
sighnifcantly
to 260 aproxemantly . fish consumption Correct your spelling
significantly
remain
Change the verb form
remains
reletively
unchanged .Correct your spelling
relatively
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