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The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Vrite at least 150 words. Percentage of the population living in cities 90: Percentage (%) of total population 8 8 6 8 8 8 8 ....O ... - Philippines ...... Malaysia - * - Thailand - Indonesia メー * - = 0 1970 1980 1990 2000 2010 2020 2030 2040

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Vrite at least 150 words. Percentage of the population living in cities 90: Percentage (%) of total population 8 8 6 8 8 8 8 ....O ... - Philippines ...... Malaysia - * - Thailand - Indonesia メー * - = 0 1970 1980 1990 2000 2010 2020 2030 2040
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The line graph depicts the total population of four
countries
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 - the Philippines, Malaysia, Thailand, and Indonesia - from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.
Overall
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, the populations of all four
countries
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 have shown dramatic increases. Specifically, Malaysia has experienced a more significant rise compared to the other
countries
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 from 1970 to 2040.
To begin
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, the initial populations of the Philippines and Malaysia were nearly equal, at approximately 30% in 1970.
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, they experienced divergent trends between 1970 and 1980.
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, Indonesia's total population started at a lower percentage, around 15% in the early years, but saw a dramatic increase of 60% by 2040.
Nevertheless
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, Indonesia faced contrasting trends with two other
countries
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, Thailand and the Philippines, respectively.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words countries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatic" was used 2 times.
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