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Write a 150-word report on the following topic: The chart shows the comparison of energy production in Australia in 1995 and 2005. 2. The

Write a 150-word report on the following topic: The chart shows the comparison of energy production in Australia in 1995 and 2005. 2. The
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The information in the pie charts demonstrates the amount of
energy
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sources
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 produced by
Australia
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 in the years 1995 and 2005.
While
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 coal and gas maintained their positions as dominant
energy
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sources
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, petroleum experienced a decrease in its share of
production
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.
Additionally
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, nuclear
energy
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 and other renewable categories played relatively minor roles in
Australia
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's
energy
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 landscape during
this
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 period. In 1995, coal emerged as the dominant
energy
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 source (29.80%), accounting for a substantial portion of
Australia
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's
energy
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production
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. The
production
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 of coal continued to maintain its dominance in 2005 as well. Gas
production
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 witnessed a notable presence in both 1995 and 2005, serving as a significant
energy
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 source for
Australia
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. Petroleum,
while
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 still significant, experienced a decline in its share of
energy
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production
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 from 29% in 1995 to 19% in 2005. Nuclear
energy
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production
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,
while
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 mentioned as one of the
energy
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sources
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, constituted a relatively small portion of
Australia
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's
overall
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energy
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production
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, around 10 %. Other categories of
energy
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production
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,
while
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 potentially smaller in scale compared to conventional
sources
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 like coal and gas, have experienced a slight rise from 4.90 % to 9.10 %
accordingly
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 during the analyzed period.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, sources, australia, production with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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