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You live near a university and would like to earn extra money by renting a room in your apartment to a student. Write a letter to the university housing office. In your letter: ● introduce yourself ● explain why your apartment would be a good living place for a student ● describe the room you have for rent

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Dear Sir or Madam,    I am writing to you because I want to rent out my
house
 for student accommodation.  I think my
house
 is the best
house
 you are looking for and it is close to your institution.    Currently, I
went
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 through the process of
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 renovation of my
apartment
. 
This
apartment
 you are looking for is located in one of the prominent locations of the city.   
This
apartment
 is perfect for you.  It has all the conditions you want. 
For example
, there is peace for your study, and there are entertainment areas for walking downstairs in my
apartment
. 
Also
, all the terms and conditions are there.    I hope
this
 is the most modern rental
house
 you want and need. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Madaminov Behruz
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task achievement
Ensure your introduction clearly states your purpose and provides relevant personal information to establish your identity in context.
task achievement
Throughout your letter, provide specific details about the room and apartment amenities which would appeal to a student, thereby matching the task requirement more closely.
coherence and cohesion
Use connecting words and phrases to create a more cohesive narrative, ensuring that your letter flows logically from introduction to conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Divide the body of your letter into paragraphs, each focusing on a single aspect of your offer, like location, facilities, or terms and conditions.
task achievement
Revise your closing statement to genuinely invite interaction or a response, reinforcing your eagerness to rent the room.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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