Studying art in school improves students' performance in other subjects, because it is easier for multi-skilled students to learn new things. That's why art should be obligatory in schools. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is considered that Studying
art
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helps
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students
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to perform in other
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very well as it gives them the ability to learn more new things. I completely agree with
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statement and
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think it is extremely important to be included as a subject in school. First of all, Studying
art
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gives the
students
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high cognition so that they become
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.
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is because it benefits them to be much experienced in
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thing
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and gives them a high quality of creativity,
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it has a great effect on having the ability to understand other
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easily and gaining high marks in
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as well as
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all other
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, A lot of
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always wait for the time to practise some guitars ,
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to music and know about lyrics so they feel satisfied about that.
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why
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should be included as a subject in school as it has many advantages.
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, Arts give the
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time to release their stress.
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is because when having a full day of science
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,
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usually feel stressed and complicated so they wait for it to release their pain
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charging themselves again to be motivated in studying other science.
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, My best friend usually has a lot of
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as he keeps himself alone in his room when it comes to
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subjects
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of science
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as Physics, Maths and chemistry. But when he goes to listen to music and enjoys reading about lyrics. he feels so active so he can perform well when trying to learn how to be a good singer.
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important to consider
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in releasing
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, I strongly believe that
art
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should be considered as a subject in school because it helps the student to have high cognition and it is considered as a stress release.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cognitive development
  • Critical thinking
  • Motor skills
  • Creativity
  • Perspectives
  • Emotional outlet
  • Cultural appreciation
  • Global awareness
  • Historical art movements
  • Spatial intelligence
  • Curriculum overload
  • Non-competitive
  • Exposure
  • Cross-disciplinary benefits
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