Studying art in school improves students' performance in other subjects, because it is easier for multi-skilled students to learn new things. That's why art should be obligatory in schools. Do you agree or disagree?
It is considered that Studying
art
helps the
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apply
students
to perform in other subjects
very well as it gives them the ability to learn more new things. I completely agree with this
statement and i
think it is extremely important to be included as a subject in school.
First of all, Studying Change the capitalization
I
art
gives the students
high cognition so that they become open minded
. Add a hyphen
open-minded
This
is because it benefits them to be much experienced in such
thing
and gives them a high quality of creativity, Fix the agreement mistake
things
Moreover
it has a great effect on having the ability to understand other Add a comma
Moreover,
subjects
easily and gaining high marks in art
as well as
all other subjects
. For example
, A lot of students
always wait for the time to practise some guitars ,listening
to music and know about lyrics so they feel satisfied about that. Wrong verb form
listen
That is
why art
should be included as a subject in school as it has many advantages.
Secondly
, Arts give the students
their
time to release their stress. Correct pronoun usage
apply
this
is because when having a full day of science subjects
,Students
usually feel stressed and complicated so they wait for it to release their pain as well as
charging themselves again to be motivated in studying other science. For instance
, My best friend usually has a lot of stresses
as he keeps himself alone in his room when it comes to Fix the agreement mistake
stress
study
Change the verb form
studying
subjects
of science such
as Physics, Maths and chemistry. But when he goes to listen to music and enjoys reading about lyrics. he feels so active so he can perform well when trying to learn how to be a good singer. Thus
, It is much
important to consider Rephrase
very
art
in releasing stresses
.
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stress
To conclude
, I strongly believe that art
should be considered as a subject in school because it helps the student to have high cognition and it is considered as a stress release.Submitted by mohamedicdl175 on
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