Some people think that strict punishments for driving offenses are the key to reducing traffic accidents. Others, however, believe that other measures would be more effective in improving road safety. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Whether considering some solid
punishment
for driving penalty in order to decreasing
traffic incidents or other Change the verb
decrease
ways
more effective for warrantying the roads is a controversial issue. I opine that although
strict punishment
is good for careless people
in driving and it leads them to do not do again
because of consequences, other Correct pronoun usage
it again
ways
might be more affectionately for warning them about consequences like treating friendly or holding some classes and
etc.
On the one hand, Correct word choice
apply
punishment
might be a frustrating process and cost recklessnesses a lot. By control
speed cameras police can recognize all cars and penalize them two or three times more than usual prices. After Replace the word
controlling
that
they know Add a comma
that,
police
can control and see Correct article usage
the police
any one
Correct your spelling
anyone
in
Change preposition
apply
any where
. Police can impound the car and do not allow them to use their car any more. Without paying completely the fine, they can not see their cars at all. On the other, if they do not pay attention to Join the words
anywhere
this
lessons, they will go to Correct determiner usage
these
the
jail or impound their certificate which is a negative point for all Correct article usage
apply
people
because for example
if they want to apply for a job, no employers will give them a job. If the government holds some boring classes with a bad atmosphere for them, they will have a bad memory and they do not come back there again, so they obey the rolls.
However
, some drivers do not pay attention to strict punishment
at all, so we should consider other ways
for them that are more effective. All in all, people
are disobedient about roles and if we set some strict punishment
we motivate them to do them again because breaking laws give
them Correct subject-verb agreement
gives
sense
of freedom. They do not know laws are held Add an article
a sense
for preventing
them and other Change preposition
to prevent
people
from dangerous situations. So we have to try different ways
to warning
them about the consequences like friendly classes which teach them how to be patient and Change the form of the verb
warn
carefully
Change the word
careful
during
driving. Give some benefits to them to encourage them to obey the rolls, like free car insurance or some discounts for buying new cars for the best and most careful drivers.Change preposition
while
In addition
, making
trust between Verb problem
building
people
and the government can plays
a drastic role in teaching them how they should be careful in driving. If Driving lessons are taught to Wrong verb form
play
teenager
in school, will be more Fix the agreement mistake
teenagers
effectively
. Introducing some Change the word
effective
people
to explain their bitter memories about their accident can warning
them about traffic accidents.
In conclusion, it is true that strict punishments are good for Wrong verb form
warn
driver
but we still witness numerous traffic accidents. I agree Fix the agreement mistake
drivers
with
that we can warranty the Change preposition
apply
roads
safety Change noun form
road's
by
other Change preposition
in
ways
which can be more effective to have reasonable and friendly behaviors
with all drivers in order to Change the spelling
behaviours
paying
more attention during driving.Change the verb
pay
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Introduction & Conclusion
Expand on your introduction by clearly outlining the views you will discuss and provide a clear thesis statement to reflect your opinion.
Introduction & Conclusion
Ensure the conclusion summarizes the main points discussed and reiterates your opinion clearly, without introducing new ideas.
Logical Structure
Develop logical paragraphs with clear topic sentences that state the main idea, followed by supporting sentences and examples.
Coherence & Cohesion
Work on clearly linking your ideas and paragraphs using a range of cohesive devices and transition words.
Task Response
Provide more specific and clear examples to support your arguments.
Task Achievement
Make sure to address all parts of the task by discussing both views fully before giving your own opinion.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite