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the current layout of University Sports Centre with a plan to redesign it.

#layout #university #sports #centre #plan #redesign
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The two pictures compare the current
layout
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 of
University
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the University
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 Sports Centre with a plan to redesign it. We can see that the new design proposal involves making a number of changes to the outdoor courts. There are no plans to change the 25m Pool.
Besides
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, the whole
layout
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 was changed from three separate parts to an
overall
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layout
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 with no spacing, and there
adds
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 Leisure and shopping areas. Looking at the information of the west of design, the outdoor courts will be changed to
leisure
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a leisure
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 pool. And a new changing room will be
nearby
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near
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 it on the southwest corner. There will be a door between
leisure
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the leisure
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 pool and
changing
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the changing
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 room. About the east of
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layout
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the layout
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, there will be added two new dance studios and one sports hall. The
sport
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sports
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 hall will take up
large
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a large
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 space on the east side. Another new changing room was installed at the southeast corner. Meanwhile, the north gym area, its square will be expanded twice
much
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 as before. It is just south of the front reception.
Sports
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A sports
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 shop will be installed in the west.
Cafe
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A cafe
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 store will be installed in
east
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the east
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introduction
Try to introduce the essay with a clearer statement that summarizes the overall changes and the reasons behind them. This will set the stage for your detailed descriptions.
conclusion
End the essay with a conclusion that summarizes the main changes and possibly reflects on their impact on the users of the sports centre.
logical structure
Improve the logical flow by connecting ideas between sentences and paragraphs with appropriate transitional phrases.
logical structure
When transitioning from discussing the west side of the design to the east, make sure to signal the shift to the reader more clearly with phrases like 'Turning to the east side...' or 'Regarding the eastern section...',
supported main points
Ensure that every change mentioned is accompanied by clear information about its location and purpose to improve clarity.
supported main points
Maintain consistency in referencing specific areas of the layout, such as always referring to 'the 25m Pool' in the same way throughout the essay.
task achievement
Use a wider range of vocabulary to describe changes, such as 'converted', 'replaced', or 'expanded', and avoid repetition of words.

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