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The graph below shows average carbon dioxide emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweeden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweeden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
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The line chart illustrates the annual carbon dioxide
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pollutions
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pollution
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 per person in
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several countries from 1967 to 2007. It is noticeable that the
emissions
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 significantly increased for Italy and Portugal.
By contrast
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, the pollution from other countries like
Sweaden
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Sweden
 and the United Kingdom declined in the fourth decades. In 1967, the lowest
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 who were produced pollution was Portugal
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 the number of
pollutions
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 only 1.6 Carbon dioxide
emissions
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 in metric
tonnes
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.
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,
emissions
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 for Italy and Portugal
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dramatically increased in
fourth
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decades
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which
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 the second decade in 1987 was approximately 3.6 metric
tonnes
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emissions
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 for Portugal and 6.8 metric
tonnes
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emissions
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of emissions
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 for Italy.
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, in 2007, the gap of gasses between Italy and Portugal reached 2.5 metric
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pollutions
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pollution
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.
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, air
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pollutions
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pollution
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of
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in
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 Sweden
had been
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increased from 1967 to 1977, after that
emissions
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was decline
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 a half from
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 in the first decade
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the amounts were 6.5 metric
tonnes
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, 5.9 metric
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, and 5.5 metric
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 in 1987,1997, and 2007, respectively.
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,
emissions
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 of the United Kingdom
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significantly decreased year by year which were 10.5, 10, 9.7, 9.5, and 9 during
period
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the period
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 from 1967 to 2007.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words pollutions, emissions, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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