The diagram below shows the process of drinking water made from rainwater in Australian town
The provided diagram depicts the
process
of providing portable water
by storing and treating rainwater in an Australian town.
Overall
, it is a lengthy process
. This
purifying process
includes several equipment such
as water
filter storage tanks chemicals and so on.
Rainfall is the starting point of this
process
. All terraces and roofs are connected with hollow pipes and as the rainfall occurs the water
passes from these hollow pipes. Then
, the water
filter is used to remove some harmful substances from the water
. The next step is
storing filtered water
. As soon as the process
of filtration is complete the water
is allowed to fall in a huge storage water
tank
. Here water
is stored for an ample period of time.
The following step is
treating the stored water
. Here, water
is allowed to flow to another tank
from the storage tank
. In this
tank
, some chemicals are added to the water
which makes rainwater portable. Finally
, after some span treated water
is passed to homes of citizens as drinkable water
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