The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accomodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accomodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar graph
explain
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the rate of people who
living
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in
own
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their own
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home
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homes
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and on
the
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rent in
the
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England and Wales in 1918 and 2011. Overview, with the expectation of 1971,
rest
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of the given years show the incline and decline trends in the accommodation. As per the provided information, in the initial year,
maximum
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the maximum
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percentages
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of people was on rent which was
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more
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than 75%,
however
almost 2
time
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less have their own home. Following by the
nest
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given year, the proportion of owned living
place
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was
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slightly increased and rented
was
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dropped by 10%,
moreover
after the gap of almost 14 years, the data
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untouched.
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,
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differences
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of 15% was
notice
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in both given categories
which
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latter
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the latter
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stood
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at
highest
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the highest
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with
appropriate
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60% in 1961.  Moving towards the rest of the
detail
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, surprisingly, household owning and renting accommodation was
same
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in 1971 with half. From 1981 to 2001, the percentage of homeowners was significantly raised and reached
at
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70% from 60% at the same time, rented
home
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homes
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was show
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downward
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trend which
witnessed
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at
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one third in 2001. Interestingly, the percentage of rented houses was around 38%,
whereas
owned accommodation was seen 25% more from
then
.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • predominant
  • accommodation
  • trend
  • shift
  • households
  • homeownership
  • economic and social circumstances
  • interwar period
  • post-World War II
  • government policies
  • urbanization
  • public policy
  • economic prosperity
  • tipping point
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