The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph compares the proportion of
households
in owned and rented
accommodation
in England and Wales in the period of 1918 to 2011. From an
overall
perspective, it is readily apparent that
while
the preference for rented
accommodation
steadily decreased, there was a surge in the number of
households
in owned
accommodation
during the given period. In 1918, there was only 20% of the
households
lived in owned
accommodation
while
almost 75% of the
households
lived in rented
accommodation
.
However
, for almost 60 years, the trend of owned
accommodation
has shown to increase and rented
accommodation
had a gradual decline.
Whereas
in 1971, there was a similar percentage of
households
that lived in owned and rented
accommodation
. After that, the proportion of
households
in owned
accommodation
continued to rise up to 65%,
while
the preference for rented
accommodation
has
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experienced an enormous drop to around 35% in 2011.
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