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The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph compares the proportion of
households
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 in owned and rented
accommodation
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 in England and Wales in the period of 1918 to 2011. From an
overall
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 perspective, it is readily apparent that
while
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 the preference for rented
accommodation
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 steadily decreased, there was a surge in the number of
households
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 in owned
accommodation
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 during the given period. In 1918, there was only 20% of the
households
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 lived in owned
accommodation
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while
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 almost 75% of the
households
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 lived in rented
accommodation
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.
However
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, for almost 60 years, the trend of owned
accommodation
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 has shown to increase and rented
accommodation
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 had a gradual decline.
Whereas
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 in 1971, there was a similar percentage of
households
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 that lived in owned and rented
accommodation
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. After that, the proportion of
households
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 in owned
accommodation
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 continued to rise up to 65%,
while
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 the preference for rented
accommodation
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has
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experienced an enormous drop to around 35% in 2011.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words households, accommodation with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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