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The tables below give the distribution of the world population in 1950 and 2000, with an estimate of the situation in 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The tables below give the distribution of the world population in 1950 and 2000, with an estimate of the situation in 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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That
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 tables provide data on
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population
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the population
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 and distributions of the
world
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 in two separate yards 9 to 50 and 2000 and
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a projection
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projection
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 of
situation
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the situation
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 in 2015. It can be seen that the highest number of
people
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 live in Asia,
while
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 Oceania was the country which
have
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 experienced
lowest
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the lowest
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population
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. It is
also
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 noticeable that the
overall
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world
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population
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 will increase by 2050
projected
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apply
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. Looking at that table data sets in more detail, it is evident that there was an increase in the number of
people
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 who live in Asia from 56% in 1950 to
people
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 59% in 2000 which was the highest point on the chart.9% of
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population
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the population
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 was in Africa which increased dramatically from 9% in 1950 to 20% in 2000 a Rise of 11%.Between 1950 and 2000,
distribution
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the distribution
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 of
world
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Population
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 by region, Latin America
consists
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consisted
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6
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of 6
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%
in1950
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in 1950
,and it rose
9
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to 9
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% in 2000. Accounting to the remaining data sets, 22% of
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the world
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world
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world's
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Population
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distributed
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is distributed
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 in Europe, which
show
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shows
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 a decrease
by
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of
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 13%
in
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between
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 1950 and 2000. The
people
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 who live in North America
also
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 follow the same trend
like
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as
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 Europe which was shown a period of stability with 1%. In terms of future
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 the
world
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population
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 will follow an increasing trend from 2.5 million to 9.5 estimated in
100-year
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the 100-year
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 period
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, world, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "sets" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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