Today more and more tourist are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctica. What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?
A lot of people have been interested in traveling
some
areas Change preposition
to some
such
as the Sahara or the Antarctic where the environment are
not good to liveCorrect subject-verb agreement
is
.
It is said that there are two Change preposition
in.
side
to a coin, visiting like that place has advantages and disadvantages sides. One Change to a plural noun
sides
such
as
benefit is that tourist would be able to experiences to live in Change preposition
apply
this
environment and other national habits, by the way
the disadvantage is Add the comma(s)
way,
thet
, Correct your spelling
that
such
as conditions could be mainly
reason Change the adverb
main
of
deterioration of their healthy.
One of the Change preposition
for
advantage
of going Change to a plural noun
advantages
such
as place is Change preposition
to such
tourist
can get experience Fix the agreement mistake
tourists
leaning
Correct your spelling
learning
habitat
and environment and Change preposition
about habitat
this
way they forget anything wat they learned in this
places. No Correct determiner usage
these
metter
what they read in Correct your spelling
matter
book
or gain knowledge from watching Add an article
a book
video
or listening Fix the agreement mistake
videos
someone
, Change preposition
to someone
and
it is experience completely different. Correct word choice
apply
As well as
, theycould
learn about their local Correct your spelling
they could
knowledges
or cultures. Change the wording
knowledge
pieces of knowledge
bits of knowledge
For instance
, most of the visitors are going to Sahara to ride camels or diving form sand-hills
by cars.
On Correct your spelling
from sand hills
th eother
hand, not many people Correct your spelling
the other
able
to adapt to extreme weather or conditions. Add a missing verb
are able
This
is becouse
their body would Correct your spelling
because
nor
able to Verb problem
not be
manege
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manage
with
Change preposition
apply
incredibly
climate changes. So that they Change the word
incredible
fill
ill and it would be mainly reason of the death.
In conclusion, Verb problem
feel
although
being adventurous can be good in terms of experiencing different cultures and habitats, it can also
lead to health problems. Tourists must know if their body is capable of adapting to extreme climate
before taking Fix the agreement mistake
climates
further
steps in planning their trip. If not, they must prioritize their body over fun trips.Submitted by ilyosov2003 on
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coherence cohesion
Your introduction should clearly state the advantages and disadvantages you will discuss, providing a roadmap for your essay. Avoid general statements and focus on specific points.
coherence cohesion
Organize your ideas in paragraphs, each containing one main idea with supporting sentences. Use a variety of linking words to connect ideas and paragraphs together clearly.
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Support your main points with specific examples. Instead of speaking in broad terms, refer to real-world instances or hypothetical situations that clearly illustrate the benefits and disadvantages you are discussing.
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Make sure to provide an equal discussion of both benefits and disadvantages to fully answer the question. Both sides should be explored with equal depth and detail.
task achievement
Pay close attention to grammar and vocabulary. Use a variety of sentence structures and vocabulary to demonstrate language proficiency. Check for and correct any grammatical errors.
Fully explain your ideas
To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).
For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:
- Paragraph 1 - Introduction
- Sentence 1 - Background statement
- Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
- Sentence 3 - Thesis
- Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
- Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
- Sentence 4 - Conclusion
- Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
- Sentence 4 - Conclusion
- Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
- Sentence 1 - Summary
- Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
- Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation
Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.