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the diagram illustrates the production of noodles and the manufacturing stages. describe it.

the diagram illustrates the production of noodles and the manufacturing stages. describe it.
The diagram above illustrates the production of noodles and the manufacturing stages.
Overall
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, it can be observed that there are 8 phases of making noodles. The main two are transporting and packaging.
To begin
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 with, the flour
were
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was
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 taken from the storage silos,
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then
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and then
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 combined
it
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apply
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with water and oil inside the mixer. After that, it will produce dough sheets and later will enter the machine that cuts it into strips.
Next,
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the dough strips will be turned into noodle discs. After that, the noodle discs will be cooked with oil. After it
dried
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is dried
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, it will be placed into cups. The spices and the vegetables will
also
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 be placed inside the cups.
Last
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, the cups will be
labeled
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labelled
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 and sealed
then
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 it’s ready to be marketed.

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Contractions: Don't use contractions.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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