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You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about wheter to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job. - why he/she whould not enjoy going to college - explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her - suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her

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Dear Saini, Hi, how are you doing? I hope you are doing well. I received your letter about your concern that now you are confused between going to
college
 and getting a job. I'm so glad that I can give you some advice or tips. I think that you don't need to go to
college
. As I know, you always want to become a chef at a Novotel Hotel.
This
 position does not require a
college
 degree but cooking experience or skill is important.
Above all
, if you get a job, you can get various work experiences and learn diverse skills from them. It will be helpful to improve your skills. Another thing is that the
college
 fee is so expensive these days so you should spend money at least $10,000 a year. You cannot save a lot of money though. You ask me which type is good for you. I highly recommend the chef which is your goal. The reason why I suggest is that you are good at cooking. When I eat your food, it is always tasty. Plus, you have plenty of part-time experience at a restaurant as a chef's assistant you can get a job without difficulty. I hope
this
 letter can help your choice. If you need anything help from me, please do not hesitate to contact me! Thank you.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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