Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case?Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Technology specifically

smartphones

is a big revolution in

this

era and aspects of using it beyond the bad ones.Despite of using it can improve life quality,for

majoirty

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majority

of

children

should be limited

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doesn’t have

negative

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effect on them.Is limitation a good choice rather than

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them to

don’t

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get involved too much in

smartphones

?.

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This

essay will identify the reasons why using too much of

smartphones

could be harmful

for

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children

.

Firstly

,less communication and after that

less

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firendships

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friendships

friendship

in

real

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world

for example

play

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in a park with a friend is the first aspect of

smartphones

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addiction.Playing games and wasting time

in

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on

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social

medias

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are

the

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examples of addiction

of

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smartphones

could be dangerous for their health and mindset of life.Parents should increase their

children

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awareness of how wasting their time using

smartphones

can damage their childhood and

also

their mindset in

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longterm

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.

Furthermore

,

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on

smartphone

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smartphones

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rather than

study

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or school may

also

hurt the

children

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mind

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as they feel disappointed if they get a bad score.

However

,in many

cases

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school lessons are boring for

children

and they don’t know the importance of learning

those

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.Schools and parents should have a plan for

children

to

aware

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of their priorities in their lives to get

along with

both

study

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well and using

smartphones

.

Lastly

,using

smartphones

hours

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everyday

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is

opposite

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of letting them know what talent they have and what is their real interest in some sections

such

as art and sports.

Moreover

,

children

must have the experience of getting involved in helpful classes in sports and art to know their real

interest

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.Interested in a specific class which is helpful in the mentioned ones could be a motivation for them to spend

smartphones

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on smartphones

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less

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.

To conclude

,there are several effects of

smartphones

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addiction in

children

such

as less friendship,low

score

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scores

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in school and preventing

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them to

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to know

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from knowing

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their real

interest

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interests

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.Awareness that parents and schools can make in their

mind

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minds

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could be helpful.