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These pictures illustrate how tomato ketchup is produced. There are 18 steps in the diagram, from picking the tomatoes to use the ketchup.

#pictures #tomato #ketchup #steps #tomatoes
At
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 the first
stage
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stage,
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 the
tomatoes
 are picked and put in
basket
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a basket
the basket
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,
the following step is
 that sort
tomatoes
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the tomatoes
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 based on
quality
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their quality
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of
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apply
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it
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, once the
tomatoes
 are sent to
factory
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the factory
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, different parts of the
tomatoes
 are separated from seeds, stalk and skin, after the removing stage, the
tomatoes
 are put in the container and
then
 crushed. at
this
pont
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point
 sugar, vinegar and salt have
added
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been added
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. After being boiled, the
tomatoes
 have been allowed to rest for two hours before being poured into a bottle.
Subsequently
, the bottles are
labeled
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 and
also
 undergo quality control.
Following
this
,
while
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 the bottles are packed
in to
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into
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 the boxes. they load
on to
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onto
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 the lorry and
and
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apply
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taken
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take
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to
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it to
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supermarkes
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supermarkets
supermarket
.The final step is that you use the ketchup with your food.
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Coherence & Cohesion
Ensure a clear logical structure by organizing your essay into clear paragraphs including an introduction to the topic, a series of paragraphs detailing the sequential steps of the process, and a concluding statement.
Coherence & Cohesion
Include an introduction with a paraphrase of the task prompt and an overview of the main stages of the ketchup production process.
Coherence & Cohesion
Support main points by providing a detailed description of each step, ensuring the sequence is logical and easy to follow.
Task Achievement
Respond to the task by covering all steps in the process comprehensively, with clear transitions between each stage.
Task Achievement
Use an appropriate range of vocabulary to describe the process in a clear and comprehensive way, avoiding repetition and ambiguity.
Task Achievement
Include specific examples or relevant details where possible to support the description of each step. While a process diagram may not lend itself to traditional 'examples,' details like time durations, temperature settings, or measurements can add depth.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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