People who go to live in other countries, should follow the customs and traditions of the new country. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Some
people
argue that individuals who migrate to a new place
should follow the practices and rituals which are native to that place
.I completely agree with this
opinion that people
should follow the traditions
of a new area where they move
.
First of all, follow
the Wrong verb form
following
traditions
of a new place
are
not only Unnecessary verb
apply
help
us to mitigate the feelings of isolation but Correct subject-verb agreement
helps
also
a way of showing respect to
Change preposition
for
others
beliefs. Change noun form
others'
other's
For example
, if you move
to a country
like Australia where christmas
is celebrated with pomp and show, and when you Change the capitalization
Christmas
also
take part in these festivals preparation you not
feel Change the verb form
do not
did not
lonliness
in a new Correct your spelling
loneliness
place
.Moreover
, it is also
a method of displaying esteem for their moral values.For example
, a person who adopts the culture
of a nation give
the message that he Change the verb form
gives
respect
the practices and rituals innate to that Correct subject-verb agreement
respects
place
.Thus
, following a country
Change noun form
country's
culture
assists in removing lonelinesss
and Correct your spelling
loneliness
also
a way to show respect for their Add a missing verb
is also
traditions
.
Secondly
, if people
follow the migrating country
values it will assist them in building strong relationship
with others and Fix the agreement mistake
relationships
also
provide more career opportunities.To begin
with, when people
try to absorb in
other cultures they get a chance to meet new Change preposition
apply
people
and they make friends at
new Change preposition
in
place
Fix the agreement mistake
places
immeditely
.Correct your spelling
immediately
This
, in turn, will result in more employment opportunities as well.Furthermore
, when individuals mix with the country
culture
where they move
it will also
help them to increase their social circle and more jobs available to them as compared to those people
who remain isolated.For instance
, American research shows that people
who diffuse in
other Change preposition
to
culture
have Fix the agreement mistake
cultures
less
feelings of Change the quantifier
fewer
home sickness
than those who do not adopt.Correct your spelling
homesickness
Therefore
, adopting new place
practices also
assist
in making new friends and finding more jobs.
In conclusion, Correct subject-verb agreement
assists
i
believe that following a new Change the capitalization
I
place
Change noun form
place's
culture
and traditions
only have
benefits like, making new friends, more employment opportunities and no feelings of isolation.Correct subject-verb agreement
has
However
, we should not forget thier
own customs Correct your spelling
their
while
move
to a new Change the verb form
moving
country
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