Some people think that the government should be responsible for crime prevention, while others believe that it is the responsibility of the individual to protect themselves. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.
It
still
debated about the Add a missing verb
is still
individual
should take care Fix the agreement mistake
individuals
themselves
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of themselves
from
any Change preposition
apply
crime
commitment and some people
say it obviously
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is obviously
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the responsible
responsible
of the Replace the word
responsibility
government
. It will be discussed and explain
in the following essay.
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explained
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the one hand, the Change preposition
On
government
should makes
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make
the
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apply
regulation
related Fix the agreement mistake
regulations
crime
prevention and need to socialise that for all Change preposition
to crime
of
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apply
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the citizen
citizen
. For sure all Fix the agreement mistake
citizens
of
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apply
people
understand about
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that
their
could get arrested if they commit Correct pronoun usage
they
crime
and Add an article
a crime
the crime
also
inappropriate behaviour which is
disadvantages Unnecessary verb
apply
others
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other
people
. For example
, the government
restrict citizen
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citizens
to avoid
using Verb problem
from
drug
. And makes socialization about the negative impact Fix the agreement mistake
drugs
using
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of using
drug
for all Fix the agreement mistake
drugs
people
. Furthermore
, the government
should make sure the people
to
get basic Fix the infinitive
apply
necessity
like food, health bills, and education. Fix the agreement mistake
necessities
Thus
, if all of that is
pricey. It can makes
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make
people
doing
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commit
crime
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crimes
such
as steal
or Wrong verb form
stealing
rob
a house.
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robbing
In
the other hand, Change preposition
On
the
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apply
individual
need to prepare Fix the agreement mistake
individuals
themselve
with basic martial art Correct your spelling
themselves
for
protect Change preposition
to
themselve
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themselves
eventually
get any kind of Correct word choice
and eventually
threaten
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threatening
crime
. It is
can prevent Unnecessary verb
apply
themselve
if they get the other want to do bad Correct your spelling
themselves
thing
toward your life. Fix the agreement mistake
things
And
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Also
also
the individual should wear appropriate which is
not appear excessive. Verb problem
does
For
instance
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instance,
the
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apply
people
should not use expensive jewerly
when Correct your spelling
jewellery
walk
alone. It can reduce Change the verb form
walking
desire
for Add an article
the desire
people
to commit crime
because there Fix the agreement mistake
crimes
no
potential for doing a Add a missing verb
is no
crime
.
In conclusion, the authority
should Fix the agreement mistake
authorities
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make
makes
a regulation Wrong verb form
make
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to
for
prevent Change preposition
to
people
commit a
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apply
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crimes
crime
and Fix the agreement mistake
crimes
also
provided
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provide
people
with basic needs while
the
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apply
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individuals
individual
prepare Fix the agreement mistake
individuals
themselve
with martial Correct your spelling
themselves
art
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arts
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to
for
protect Change preposition
to
themselve
and Correct your spelling
themselves
also
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wear
wearing
appropriate like not using Wrong verb form
wear
appear
Verb problem
apply
jewelry
when Change the spelling
jewellery
Wrong verb form
walking
walk
alone. It can reduce Wrong verb form
walking
desire
to commit a Add an article
the desire
crime
because disappear the opportunity.Submitted by fiez97 on
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task achievement
Ensure that you address all parts of the prompt equally. The essay should discuss both views and give your own opinion, which should be clear and separate from the two discussed views.
coherence cohesion
Use a variety of connective words and phrases to help with the flow of your essay and make certain to start new paragraphs for new ideas, which will enhance the overall coherence and cohesion.
task achievement
Develop your main points with specific examples and explanations. Rather than just stating an idea, explain it fully with details that support the point you're trying to make.
coherence cohesion
Proofread your work to correct grammatical errors and improve sentence structure for clarity. Incoherent sentences can distract from the overall argument you are making.
Your opinion
Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.
If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.
Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.
Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:
...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?