The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned

future development of the site.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and

make comparisons where relevant.
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The following maps illustrate the current industrial district in Norbiton city and the residential district which will be developed in the future, replacing the latter.
Overall
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,
this
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part of the side of Norbiton City will be undergoing massive changes, currently, it is surrounded by factories and it will all be replaced by housing and necessary facilities
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as hospitals, schools, and shops. First of all, in the centre
area
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just before the large roundabout, a new smaller roundabout will be built to control traffic flow in and out of the
area
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. Just after entering the large roundabout, various shops will be put together, so the residents can buy their household needs near their homes. On the opposite of the new shopping
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, southeast of the large roundabout, a new healthcare centre will be established to provide immediate treatment for the people.
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, in the north
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of the large roundabout, there will be a new road and a bridge constructed over the river to connect the new housing
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beside the farmland. Meanwhile, the existing long road on the east side from the large roundabout will be surrounded by three blocks of houses and the factory on the end of the road will be demolished and replaced by a school, so the residents do not have to go all the way to the town.
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, a spacious playground will be constructed between the two blocks of houses, giving the residents space to gather the community.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words area with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • industrial area
  • planned future development
  • factories
  • warehouses
  • railway line
  • shopping center
  • residential buildings
  • college
  • mixed-use zone
  • commercial
  • residential
  • educational
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian walkways
  • housing
  • community
  • retail services
  • revitalize
  • quality of life
  • vibrant
  • sustainable
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