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The two pie charts below show the marital status of the populations of Canada and Australia. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two pie charts below show the marital status of the populations of Canada and Australia. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts illustrate
informations
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information
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 about Australia and
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canada's
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Canada's
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citizen
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citizens
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 on marital status.
Overall
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, in 1999
biggest
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the biggest
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 share belonged to married and never married people in Australia
while
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 for
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canada's
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Canada's
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 population singles followed by legally married
couples
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 showed the highest numbers in 2000. As can be observed, 53% and 29% of
Australia
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Australian
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 men and women either were married or never had a spouse in their
life time
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lifetime
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.
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, The divorced and widowed
indivuals
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individuals
 each had 7% of the chart whilst the
seperated
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separated
couples
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 and
same sex
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same-sex
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 marriages made
4
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up 4
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% of the pie chart in total.
Moreover
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,singles and
legaly
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legally
 married
couples
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 made
46
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up 46
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 and 41 per cent of
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canada's
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Canada's
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 chart.
Nonetheless
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, widows and divorced
couples
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 each made
5
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up 5
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% and 6% of
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canada's
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Canada's
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 population.
Finally
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,
seperated
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separated
separate
couples
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 held the lowest share of 2%.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words canada, couples with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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