The two charts below show the living arrangements of two different age groups in a certain country in 2015.

The

given

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pie charts give information about who people live with, grouped into two various

age

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ages

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in one country in the year 2015.

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, what stands out from the graph is that

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individuals who lived with their parents and with their flatmates, both decreased after turning

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years

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old.

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, older

poeple prefered

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people prefer

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to live with their partners or

spouse

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than youngsters. In 2015, People who were 25 to 34

years

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old

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selected to live with their mothers and fathers and

also

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more chose to share a home with another person, but after getting older they decreased.

Also

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, the percentage of those who lived alone, between 25 and 34

years

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old, almost stayed the same for 35-44

years

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old

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. Turning to the figure for

yonger

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younger

people who lived with a

girl friend

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girlfriend

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boy friend

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boyfriend

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or their spouse, it was the same as

living

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the living

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alone percentage, but it saw a

dramatical

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trend by around getting triple in the older ages.

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Feb 11, 2024

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