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Many countries have embraced tourism as a way to boost their economies and create jobs for local residents. However, some argue that tourism can have negative impacts on the environment and local cultures. What are the advantages and disadvantages of tourism for a country

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the
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tourism
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 has increased significantly.
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 there are several advantages
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 the
growth
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tourism
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, it can have some disadvantages as well. In
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 I will try to discuss both
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 and negative sides of
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 and draw a conclusion. On the one hand, there are several benefits of the
growth
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 of
tourism
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. The first merit of it is considered to be that
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folk will
to
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bring profits.
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, Historical museums need to multiply, and tours are come to for
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. So it will
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 a lot of money. Another negative aspect is thought to be that
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is money of
country
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the country
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 covered
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.
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 because for tourists were all things done: nutrition, tickets, fares
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mentioned
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 positives, the
growth
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 of
tourism
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 allows communication with other
countiries
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countries
. One of the major disadvantages of it is that one disadvantage is the increase in overspending in the state.
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toursts
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tourists
are learn
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 for
country
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the country
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,
multiply
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and multiply
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 will learn zones. In conclusion,
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tourism
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 as a way to boost their economies and create jobs for local residents can offer positives, there may be some
drawback
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 too. From my personal point of view,
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the advantages
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 of
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outweigh
 the disadvantages.
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Coherence & Cohesion
To improve your essay, focus on organizing your ideas more logically. Each paragraph should clearly discuss one main point related to the advantages or disadvantages of tourism. Avoid mixing points within paragraphs.
Coherence & Cohesion
Make sure your introduction and conclusion are clear and properly summarize your main points. Your conclusion should reflect the discussion in the essay without introducing new ideas.
Task Achievement
Provide specific examples to support your arguments. Instead of making general statements, use detailed examples from real situations or hypothetical scenarios that clearly demonstrate your points.
Task Achievement
Clarify your ideas for a better task response. Each paragraph should have a clear main idea that is directly related to the advantages or disadvantages of tourism. Avoid vague or confusing statements.
General
Work on grammar and vocabulary to enhance clarity. Using the correct grammar structures and a wide range of vocabulary can significantly improve the quality of your essay and help convey your ideas more effectively.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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