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Global warming is one of the biggest threats to our environment. What causes global warming? What solutions are there to this problem?

#threats #environment
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Nowadays, global warming has
effect
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to
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peoples
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people
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, animals and
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the environments
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environments
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environment
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 by increasing temperature cause climate change. So,
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government
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the government
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 should supervise and solve the problem immediately. The following paragraphs examine the cause of
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 and recommend some practical solutions to help the earth get better. Factories
plays
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 a significant part in
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global
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 warming in the world by using fossil
fuel
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fuels
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 in manufacturing and
emission
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 a CO2
to
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 the air without considering
impact
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to
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 surrounding area and
environment
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the environment
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, so
authority
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 should always check
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the standard
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standard
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standards
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 of manufactory system for preventing to emission
CO2
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 according
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 rule determine. In
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, air traveling;
from
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 the experimental results when aircraft fly in 10 minutes fuel
have
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used around 2000 liters
that
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more than other traveling ways,
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,
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 restrict flying and
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 taxes
for
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 reduce
number
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 of flying.
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,
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government
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the government
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each
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 country should
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to solve
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with
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this
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to
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first
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 priority
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, industries may lead
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 increasing
the
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pollution, but undeniable that we
also
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 have part as well, nowadays, a growing number of consuming of
customer
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customers
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 may lead to waste, particularly,
a
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plastic
bag
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, which
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 biodegraded
over
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 100 years and
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pollution in the soil, water, and air. So, we should have to
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 to sociality as well,
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, we can help
community
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the community
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 by
separate
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 waste into the right bin, and reusing a plastic bag, using cloth bags or paper bags when
go
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 to shopping.
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,
authority
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 should collaborate with
business
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 side in
encourage
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 to use
a
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packaging’s
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 goods that
able
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 biodegraded. In conclusion, global warming is mainly caused by human activities and not
considering
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 with dangerous emission
CO2
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 by industries,
moreover
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,
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government
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 less attend to manage problems, which is increases
the
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global warming.
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, every side should participate
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the problem
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problem
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 for sustainable development.
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structure
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introduction
Introduce the essay topic in the opening paragraph, briefly outlining the main points that will be discussed, to provide a clear roadmap for the reader.
main points
Each paragraph should focus on a single main idea, supporting it with specific examples or evidence to strengthen the argument.
linking words
Use a variety of linking words and phrases to connect ideas and paragraphs, helping to create a smooth flow throughout the essay.
task response
Address the essay task by discussing both the causes and solutions to global warming comprehensively, ensuring all parts of the prompt are covered.
language
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Climate change
  • Earth's atmosphere
  • Carbon dioxide
  • Methane
  • Nitrous oxide
  • Emissions
  • Renewable energy
  • Energy efficiency
  • Afforestation
  • Carbon footprint
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