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Some people think living in big cities is bad for people's health. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

#people #cities #health
Big
city
 life dramatically affects our
health
, mainly
due to
 the
air
 pollution and different lifestyles compared to rural areas. Based on my experience of living in 3 different cities I support that idea.
According to
 the statistics of
UN
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the UN
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, huge cities suffer from
air
 pollution much more than towns. The quality of the
air
 in a
city
 could be up to 70% worse than in a town., it depends on amount of inhabitants,
manufacturers
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and manufacturers
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. The study by the World
Health
 Organisation that observed mental
health
, cancer and lifespan of people in towns and metropolises provides more details and facts.
For instance
,
due to
 the
air
 quality lung cancer occurs 20% more often in a big
city
as well as
 other lung diseases. Stress, which is 44% more inherent
for
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in
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city
 residences, is the main cause of the sleep disorder, anxiety and depression.
However
, the duration of life is 11% higher in the metropolis than in rural areas
since
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of
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 faster access to medicine and more qualified workers in the
health
 system.
Moreover
, after moving from my hometown which is the capital of Kazakhstan to a small village in Germany I started to notice the difference in my
health
. In the village the
air
 is other I could smell it.
Also
, I had fewer headaches because of less usage of public transport and more walking and cycling. I can conclude that living near nature, in a small
city
 could have a good impact on
health
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • respiratory problems
  • population density
  • stress levels
  • mental health issues
  • sedentary lifestyles
  • healthcare facilities
  • cardiovascular diseases
  • psychological well-being
  • recreational areas
  • social networks
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