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The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make a comparison where relevant. Write atleast 150 words.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make a comparison where relevant. Write atleast 150 words.
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The information about how the family spent their weekly wages in eight different categories in one nation is illustrated by a given bar graph between 1968 and 2018. The data has been calibrated in percentile.
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 what stands out from the graph is that the maximum dominance is given to food and leisure,
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 the fuel and power hit the lowest point. At
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first glance at the chart, it is evident that a significant discrepancy was noticed in food in 1968 and 2018 which was 35% and around 18%,
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, the percentage of housing increased from 10% to 19% between 1968 and 2018.
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 analysis reveals that a slight difference could be seen in the ratio of cash which
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 spent on fuel and power between 1968 and 2018 which was 5% and 3%, correspondingly. Moving ahead, a two-fold inclined was apparent in clothing and furniture during the period of 1968 and 2018. Analysing in more detail, the money spent on household goods remained
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 till 2018
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 was almost 9%. Probing ahead, there was a sharp increase of 14% in the percentage of money which
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was spent
 on leisure activities. The ratio of cash dramatically declined from around 9% to 3% in 1968 and 2018.
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, the proportion of money spent on transport had risen up in the given period.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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