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Many students are choosing not to study science in universities.what are the causes for that.what are the effects of that

#students #study #science #universities #effects
Nowadays lack of tendency to
studying
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science
 as a
filed
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field
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 of study can be
obsereved
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observed
 in pupils.
First,
the most explicit reason for
this
 is
amount
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the amount
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 of money which is earned in other fields.
Next,
becoming
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making
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science
 less
intresting
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interesting
 will
be resulted
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result
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 in
low
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a low
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 amount of general literacy
throughout
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among
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 the people. I will explain more in
two
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 following
paragraphes
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paragraphs
. To
beging
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begin
 with the reason
of
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for
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 reducing
urge
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the urge
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 to select
science
 in
univercities
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universities
, which is most apparent
is
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in
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 all types of these
lessones
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lessons
 are in
low-salary
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the low-salary
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 category of jobs. To be more precise, some occupations which are
selfemployment
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self-employment
self employment
 come with more income
compare
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compared
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 to
scientics
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scientific
 professions.
As a result
, youths prefer to
earning
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 more rather than be known as
a
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apply
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scientist
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scientists
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.
For example
, choosing to be head of
a
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an
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 investment is more lucrative than working as a general
practisionar
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practitioner
 in
hospital
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a hospital
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.
Obviously
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 it has a clear negative aspect on
society
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society's
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awarness
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awareness
. Despite a slight portion of the crowd
may is
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being
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science
student
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students
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, the quantity of general knowledge
is depend
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depends
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 on
this
 part of people. To clarify
this
assumpion
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assumption
 it must
be mention
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be mentioned
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 that, once
who
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someone
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master
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masters
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on
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apply
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medical treatment, can be a good eye-opener and convey knowledge of medicine to prevent potential dangers. So, by
decreasin
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decreasing
 scientists, general
litracy
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literacy
also
 will decline. In conclusion,
dedicatin
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dedication
dedicated
inadequete
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inadequate
 salary to
scintists
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scientists
 may be resulted in finding some filed
such
 as physics and
chimesty
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chemistry
not-favored
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not-favoured
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 by young in
collage
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college
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 and
consequently
, the whole public will experience a
disadvantag
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disadvantage
 which is disappearing
conciouses
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consciousness
.
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task response
To improve task response, it's crucial to address all parts of the prompt thoroughly. Make sure to provide a more balanced exploration of the causes and effects mentioned in the question. Also, including more specific examples and evidence to support your positions can help make your answers more comprehensive.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, work on better structuring your essay. Use clearer paragraph breaks and topic sentences that directly relate to the question prompt. Additionally, improve your usage of linking words to help the flow of ideas from one section to another and ensure that each paragraph logically supports your main argument.
language proficiency
Take care to proofread your work for spelling, grammar, and punctuation mistakes. Correct usage of these elements is essential for clear communication. Also, consider expanding your vocabulary to include more precise and varied language, especially when describing causes, effects, and examples.

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  • Conclusion

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