The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned

future development of the site.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and

make comparisons where relevant.
The images depict the same
a
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technical area in
town
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the town
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Norbiton
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of Norbiton
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as it is now and some changes to take place in the future.
This
town
are
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is
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located between
river
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the river
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in the north and the main road in the south
side
.
Overall
, it can be observed that a manufacturing area is going to be developed
much
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.
Thus
, it will become more convenient for the citizens and the children, with new facilities like, a playground,school and medical centre,shops.
Firstly
, significant alterations
is
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going to
be occurred
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occur
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to the farmland,it is planned to be moved to the northeastern
side
of the river .
Instead
of the farmland, will be
conctructed
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constructed
a residential area and a bridge with a t-shape path which added to the
roundbound
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roundabout
in the centre of
the
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Norbiton. Along the west
side
of the round will be added a short
street
with new housings. Meanwhile, opposite
this
short
street
are planned to build shops. As maps show, along the the
street
is going to be erected playground with
little
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path by the east
side
of the circle. On both sides of the
street
factories will be replaced by housing with reshaped in size
school
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schools
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at the end
of
this
street
closely
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to the east.
Finally
,in the middle of the main road will be
paved
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little round road linking to the central
roundbound
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roundabout
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • industrial area
  • planned future development
  • factories
  • warehouses
  • railway line
  • shopping center
  • residential buildings
  • college
  • mixed-use zone
  • commercial
  • residential
  • educational
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian walkways
  • housing
  • community
  • retail services
  • revitalize
  • quality of life
  • vibrant
  • sustainable
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