the following table shows the number of factory workers for a given tie period in germany

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number

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of male and female

employees

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and the total of both

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factories

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for every decade starting from 1851 to 1901 in Germany.

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, it is apparent that the highest

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of

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was in 1881 which had 721

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.

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in 1851 was the year that had the biggest total

employees

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at 477,100. In 1851 and 1861, the total

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of

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moderately declined to around 200,000

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and the

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of

factories

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were

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slightly higher from 225 to 227.

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in

1851

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1851,

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the total

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employees

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peaked at 477,100 and it

was decreasing

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decreased

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every 10

year

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until it hit the lowest

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in 1901 at 61,000

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.In 1871,the

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of

factories

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rapidly increased to around 400 .

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, in 1881, the

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of

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peaked at 721

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. In the next 10 years in 1891, the

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fell to 625 similar to 1871. In the

last

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period, the

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of

factories

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went down to 600