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Climate change is a concerning global issue, and many people hold a negative attitude towards it. Who should take the main action to solve this problem, governments, big companies or individuals?

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Climate
change
 has become an integral part of the rising debate in the present world.
While
 proponents of the argument are in favour,
however
, the opponents are completely against the relevance of the issue of
climate
change
. In my opinion,
climate
change
 has more positive impacts than negative
around
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 the globe. To commence with, there are
number
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a number
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 of arguments in favour of my belief. The most prominent one is that
climate
change
 is good for farmers.
According to
 the Western Sydney University,
due to
climate
change
 crops are growing faster in many parts of the world.
Secondly
,
climate
change
 can make all humans, birds, trees, fish and other animals healthy.
On the other hand
, critics may point out that one of the most significant disadvantages is that it can make the United States colder than before.
For Instance
 , A
survay
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survey
 conducted in the United States reveals that the United States is getting colder every month.
To conclude
, even when there are a lot of demerits associated with
climate
change
, the advantages outweigh the disadvantages, and
climate
change
 has become a crucial part of our
life
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lives
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.
Therefore
, efficient use of
climate
change
 should be promoted and its misuse should be condemned.
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task achievement
Ensure your essay directly addresses the prompt. The question was about who should take action on climate change, not its impacts. Refocus your content to match the task.
coherence cohesion
Develop paragraphs with clear, logical progressions of ideas. Each paragraph should start with a topic sentence that introduces the main idea, followed by supporting details or examples.
task achievement
Provide relevant examples to support your points. Use specific studies, reports, or factual information to back up your arguments, ensuring they directly tie into the main topic.
coherence cohesion
Remember to introduce your essay with a paragraph that outlines your main points and conclude with a summary of your main arguments. This structure helps readers follow your argumentation.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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