A friend of yours has a son/daughter who recently graduated and is now applying for jobs. Your friend has asked you to give their son/daughter some advice about applying for a job. Write a letter to your friend's son/daughter. In your letter - Give some advice about applying for a job. - Explain why these things are important. - Suggest a time and place you can meet to talk about this

My name is Seung, and I am one of your father's friends from South Korea. Recently, I received a message from him asking for advice on applying for jobs. I hope to help you find a
job
that fits your university experience and apply for it.
Firstly
, you should find any
job
postings that are related to your major degree on a
job
recruitment website and read all of the requirements, benefits, and about the
job
position. Unless you didn'
t
read it carefully, you could get a
job
that doesn'
t
match your long-term career plan.
Therefore
, if there are any opportunities to contact
job
recruiters working on the
job
sites, I recommend you send your CV to them and keep in touch to provide more information about you.
Thus
, they will call you back, if there is the best
job
vacancy matching
with
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your CV and the other documents you sent to them. Even if they didn'
t
reply to your request, please don'
t
get you into any nervous moods. All the things are open to you to get what you want to do. When it comes to more details, I would like to suggest
you
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that we could meet in a cafe
nearby
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my workplace
in
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lunch time
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. I think that I can give more advice and tips
for
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job
seekers like you. Don'
t
be
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hesitate to contact me and keep
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your CV and cover letter until we meet later.
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task achievement
Be more specific and clear in your advice. Instead of general suggestions, include specific actionable advice that the recipient can follow.
coherence and cohesion
Clearly delineate sections of your letter with more distinct paragraphing and transition phrases to enhance the flow of information.
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Consider using a friendly closing statement that reiterates your willingness to help and provide a specific date and time for the meeting, enhancing personal connection.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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