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The two maps below show an island, before and after construction of some tourist facilities. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show an island, before and after construction of some tourist facilities. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given maps compare the condition of an island before and after some tourist facilities were built.
Overall
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, there were no
building
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buildings
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 on the island previously and
then
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 some
tourism
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tourist
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 spots were built,
such
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 as
restaurant
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restaurants
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,
reception
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, accommodations, and
Pier
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a Pier
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. The main change of the construction is the building of
pier
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a pier
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 which lets people
to
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apply
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visit the island. When
visitor
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visitors
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 arrive at
this
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 pier, they can go straight to the
reception
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 and
restaurant
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the restaurant
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 is exactly next to the
reception
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.
Additionally
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, to visit these facilities, people can use
vehicle
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vehicles
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 by the vehicle track. Some accommodations are
also
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 provided in the east and west of the
reception
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.
In addition
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, swimming is available for
tourist
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tourists
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 who want to swim next to the beach.
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, some green
space
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spaces
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 are still available for the tourism
activitiy
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activity
activities
.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words reception with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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