With the increased global demand in oil and gas, undiscovered area of the world should be opened up to access more resourced. To what extent do you agree?
The world indeed is constantly experiencing an enormous demand
in
oil and gas. Since these two natural Change preposition
for
resources
cannot be maintained for a long time or forever, people on earth
should discover a sustainable Capitalize word
Earth
solution
. One solution
that is
mostly being talked about is discovering new areas of the world that can be opened up to access and dig up more resources
.
First thing
Fix the agreement mistake
things
first,
this
solution
is not such
a sustainable one for the future. Exploring new places will end up in the same trouble again, which is the depletion of resources
sooner or later. The expedition might take up some time and human resources
, yet it cannot guarantee the result we are hoping for. Not to mention
the myriad horrible
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of horrible
impact
Fix the agreement mistake
impacts
for
Change preposition
on
the
nature. Finding new spots to dig up some Correct article usage
apply
resources
are
alright by me, yet it should have its Correct subject-verb agreement
is
limitation
and Fix the agreement mistake
limitations
regulation
. Fix the agreement mistake
regulations
While
the parties involved in this
exploration working on this
job, the government should think another
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of another
solution
that is
beneficial in the long run.
In this
case, I would be more supportive about
another alternative, which is investing in sustainable energy Change preposition
of
such
as solar panel
, wind panels, and many more. These novel energy sources Fix the agreement mistake
panels
are
not yet fully explored and implemented. One of the Verb problem
have
reason
might be Fix the agreement mistake
reasons
about
the high cost we need to produce Change preposition
apply
such
a technology for all. However
, I still think it is better to build it up little by little rather than destroying
our pristine nature to find oil and gas.
In a nutshell, I can support the discovery of new Wrong verb form
destroy
resources spot
under some conditions and as long as it is not regarded as a final Fix the agreement mistake
resource spots
solution
. I would rather vote for investment for
new Change preposition
in
invention
or research to stop Fix the agreement mistake
inventions
this
activity to create a healthy earth for all, for our generation and the generations afterwards.Submitted by ru.kabiru.biru on
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