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The tables give information about the temperatures and hours of daylight in London and Sydney during the same weekend in December 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The tables give information about the temperatures and hours of daylight in London and Sydney during the same weekend in December 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given tables compare the data of daily
temperature
 and daytime from 28th to 30th December 2018 in
London
 and
Sydney
. At
a
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first glance, it can clearly be seen that
Sydney
 was much warmer than
London
.
Moreover
,
Sydney
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the Sydney
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 population enjoyed longer sunlight. In terms of the weather, in
London
, the warmest and lowest
temperature
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temperatures
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 were 13C and 3C, respectively, which happened
at
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 the same day, Saturday 29th.
On the contrary
,
Sydney
as
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is as
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 twice
hotter
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hot
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, with 31C as the highest
temperature
, and 17C as the coldest.
Although
 the
significant
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a significant
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 difference between both states'
temperature
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temperatures
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, the discrepancy between the maximum and minimum temperatures was quite
same
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the same
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, around 10C. Regarding the average sun exposure, dawn and dusk in
Sydney
 were at around 5.45 and 20.07, respectively, making
Sydney
 had roughly 15 hours of daylight,
while
London
 only experienced half
than
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that. Sun in
London
was
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started to rise approximately at 8.05 and set at almost 16.00.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words temperature, london, sydney, c with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • temperatures
  • hours of daylight
  • comparison
  • London
  • Sydney
  • December 2018
  • weekend
  • information
  • data
  • summarise
  • select
  • report
  • features
  • analysis
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