The graph compares the rate of smoking in men and women in Someland between the years 1960 and 2000. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information in the graph below. The graph compares the rate of smoking in men and women in Someland between the years 1960 and 2000. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information in the graph below.
The line graph above depicts information about the ratio of smokers in Someland between the years 1960 and 2000. The rates were divided by gender, men and women.
To begin
with, it showed that the highest rate of smokers throughout the period was men in 1960, around 600 in every 1000 people. However
, this
number was
gradually decreased to 500 in 1975 and continued to step down until its lower score in 2000 to just over 250. Unnecessary verb
apply
In contrast
, for women in that country, it steadily increased from approximately 90 in 1960 to around 310 in 1985. Thereafter
the figures remained stable at 300 in 1985, subsequently
dropped
Wrong verb form
dropping
at
200 in 2000.
Change preposition
to
Overall
, it clearly shows that male smokers in Someland have always had the highest scores rather than
Change preposition
to
the
females.Correct article usage
apply
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