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The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart above
illustrate
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illustrates
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 the ten
countries
of
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with
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the
higher
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highest
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in
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apply
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the
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apply
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production and consumption of
electricity
 in 2014.
General
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In general
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 way, we can see that China took
first
 place in
production
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the production
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 and consumption of
electricity
,
in addition
, the second country is United
state
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, took second place and was almost a
small
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smaller
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 percentage than the
first
.
Frstly
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Firstly
, the most noticeable that the
first
 and second
countries
 do not have a big difference between them,
by contrast
, between other
countries
were
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slowly
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.
Secondly
, Russia came in third place and was 80% lower in
produced
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production
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 and
consumped
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consumption
 of
electricity
compation
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compared
of
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to
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 the
first
 group,
moreover
, other
the
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apply
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countries
 gradually
decrease
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decreased
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 by 10%, respectively and
finaly
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finally
 Korea ranks
last
 in
electricity
 production and consumption.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, electricity, first with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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