IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 8

The Pie chart gives information about the country of birth of people living in Australia and the table shows where people born in these countries live. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The Pie chart gives information about the country of birth of people living in Australia and the table shows where people born in these countries live. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
#information #country #birth #people #australia #countries #summarise #features #comparisons
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The introduced graph and table illustrate the percentage of
people
Use synonyms
 living in Australia and the information about the countries they were born.
According to
Linking Words
 the data, the proportion of native-born Australians exceeds the amount of those who immigrated there, comprising 73%. In fact, most citizens live in urban areas. Looking more closely at the pie chart, the percentage of
people
Use synonyms
 from the UK is twice
bigger
Correct word choice
as big
show examples
 as the figure for those from New Zealand, making 7% and 3% respectively.
In addition
Linking Words
, particularly one-fifth of the contingent comes from China, the Netherlands and other countries. Despite the fact, that
people
Use synonyms
 prefer to live in cities, the proportion of those coming from New Zealand takes the lowest position on the list.
However
Linking Words
,
this
Linking Words
 percentage (20%) leads among the contingent living in rural areas.
Nevertheless
Linking Words
, the Chinese tend to live in the countryside less than others, comprising just 1%. Among the
people
Use synonyms
 who come from the UK, Australia and the Netherlands, the proportion illustrates nearly one-tenth of citizens choosing rural areas and nine-tenth of
people
Use synonyms
 living in cities.
Submitted by julykryuchkova on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Vocabulary: Replace the words people with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "illustrate" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
▼
What to do next:
Look at other essays: