The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart explains the variation in
percentage
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the percentage
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of individuals
were
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who were
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born inside and outside
Austaralia
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Australia
who lived in urban,
countryside
and town
areas
in the period between 1995 to 2010.
Overall
, the chart illustrates that
ther
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there
is a slight increase for people who live in cities,
while
there is a gradual decrease for those who live in
towns
and
countryside
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the countryside
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during the examined period.
Moreover
,
citizens
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for citizens
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who
born
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were born
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outside Australia during that period, there
is
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was
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a gradual increase
for
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in
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cities and a decrease rate for
towns
and
countryside
areas
. In 1995, the figures
shows
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show
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that 60
percent
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per cent
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of citizens
born
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were born
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outside Australia
for
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in
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cities area,
while
40
percent
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per cent
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of Australian people
born
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were born
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inside the country. In 2010, there
is
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was
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a sharp increase in urban
areas
, as the
people
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number of people
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born outside was 80
percent
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per cent
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,
while
those
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for those
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born inside the rate was 40
percent
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per cent
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. On
other
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the other
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hand, the
individuals
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number of individuals
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born inside Australia in the
countryside
and
towns
was 18
percent
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per cent
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, and those
who
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apply
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born
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were born
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outside in
towns
and urban
areas
ws
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was
15% and 10% respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 68%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words countryside, areas, towns, percent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Percentage
  • Demographic
  • Trends
  • Urban areas
  • Rural areas
  • Town
  • Native-born
  • Foreign-born
  • Migration patterns
  • Economic factors
  • Government policies
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Steady
  • Peak
  • Trough
  • Time frame
  • Significant changes
  • Distribution
  • Notable
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