Write about the following topic: Children today play very violent games. This must be the reason for the increase in violence and crime in most major cities of the world. What are your opinions on this? Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

Nowadays It's really easy to get angry with anything. For
poeoples
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peoples
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future
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future,
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the main
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role
takes
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their
children
. There
many
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are many
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reasons why parents can't grow calm
children
.
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of the
reason
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reasons
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is computer
games
. There
many
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are many
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types of computer
games
for different
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children
,
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and half
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of them do not lead to mention
attack
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attacks
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or brain
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storm
, but
games
as
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PG Mobile, CSgo and so on
result
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the result
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to
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noncontroled
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noncontrolled
uncontrolled
, hyperactive
children
. The general
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goals
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of
this
game
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killing
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the enemy
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.
Traditionaly
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Traditionally
, playing
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must be
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and
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educational
educationally
for all the
children
, step by step scientists create more cognitive
games
for
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young
long
babyes
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babies
and kids , but any
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actions
for teenagers. In 2020
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my research in
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area, the generally for teens, in
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project was found interesting facts more than half
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of
them don't realize their future without computer
games
. I found
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a solution
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for
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this
problem, parents need to
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be
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in their
children
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children's
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lifes
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lives
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as much as
posible
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possible
. At all it may be
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a simple
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routine, making dinner together or
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picnic
with family.
It
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It is
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important to do something with kids, be
team
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a team
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.
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