In many countries traditional food is being replaced by international fast food. Some claim that this has negative effects on both families and societies. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is often considered that
the
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number of countries replaced traditional
food
items
by
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with
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junk meals. Many population
thinks
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that
this
has
an adverse effects
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an adverse effect
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on families
as well as
socities
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societies
.
Thus
, I assent from the notion which
further
leads to a logical conclusion. Commencing, there are various factors which
gives
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the evidence of unfavourable effects of
fashionalable
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fashionable
meals. First and foremost, these junk cuisines are much tastier but it's not good to eat on
daily
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basis because it can block our veins
as a consequence
of
this
is
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enhancement of disease to our body.
Moreover
, these junk foods are cooked
with
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using a great amount of unprocessed oil which is really detrimental
for
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our
health
although
cuisines are not cooked in a clean place as well.
For example
, the 'Zee News' illustrates the dairy milk chocolate having worms creeping over the chocolate bar which is annoying to the public. Probing ahead, the junkies are only to make you ecstatic but not
conatining
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containing
any nutritional values compared to the traditional foods.
Stuffs
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Stuff
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which are prepared at home are full of vitamins and necessary
health
benefits which everyone
require
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for a healthy lifestyle.
However
, fast meals
serves
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cause
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a person to be fat and
additionally
, full of
health
issues rather than a happy life.
For instance
, youths like gym freaks and film stars are
health
concious
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conscious
which
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and
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always prefer to eat healthy diets. In a nutshell, the populace should eat international fast
food
occasionally with limited
amount
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and after eating these foods, take a digestion drink which balances the nutritional values.
Instead
of having fashionable
food
, make your daily
food
in
tastier
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a tastier
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manner.
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