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The pie chart below represents the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The bar chart shows how these causes affected three regions of the world in the 1990s. Summarise the data by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The pie chart below represents the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The bar chart shows how these causes affected three regions of the world in the 1990s. Summarise the data by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The two illustrations summarize data on the causes of becoming less productive land all over the world. The pie chart presents some reasons for land degradation,
whereas
 the table portrays these facts by region. From an
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taken into consideration are deforestation, over-grazing, overcultivation, and other causes.
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, the regions
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taken into consideration are North America, Europe, and Oceania.
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, what stands out is that European lands were in the most danger as they degraded by 23% in comparison with other lands during the 1990s. First and foremost, it can be seen from the pie chart that in terms of land degradation causes, except
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, the rest have had approximately the same portion which was 35%, 30% and 28% for over-gazing, deforestation and over-cultivation segment respectively.
On the other hand
, regarding the analysis from the table, the least region that was threatened by degradation was North America with just 5
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,
while
 Oceania’s portion was 13%.
In addition
, the highest was Europe with 23%.
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