The chart below shows the percentage of people accessing news via different media in one country in 2013, 2015, 2017.

The chart below shows the percentage of people accessing news via different media in one country in 2013, 2015, 2017.
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chart below represents the proportion of
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accessing different
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in one country. It shows us the information in three different years and the differences which appeared.        
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, in the grid below we can observe that
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television was the most accessed by
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compared to printed
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which was not really searched by
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.          
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, we can see that internet
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is
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liked by
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especially in 2017 almost 70% are using it. About
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we can notice that it is quite
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in the middle of being more accessed than
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way which the maximum was in
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2013 about 42% in the
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two years and considerably less accessed than internet form in 2017.           Going back to internet
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we can see that it actually just increased in all three years which is making it the second
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accessed after television. The printed
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due to
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the chart is not really used anymore.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, media with synonyms.
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