The chart below shows the percentage of people accessing news via different media in one country in 2013, 2015, 2017.

The chart below shows the percentage of people accessing news via different media in one country in 2013, 2015, 2017.
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chart below represents the proportion of
people
accessing different
media
in one country. It shows us the information in three different years and the differences which appeared.        
Firstly
, in the grid below we can observe that
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television was the most accessed by
people
compared to printed
media
which was not really searched by
people
.          
Further
, we can see that internet
media
is
also
liked by
people
especially in 2017 almost 70% are using it. About
radio
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radio,
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we can notice that it is quite
of
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in the middle of being more accessed than
printed
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the printed
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way which the maximum was in
the
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2013 about 42% in the
last
two years and considerably less accessed than internet form in 2017.           Going back to internet
media
we can see that it actually just increased in all three years which is making it the second
more
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most
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accessed after television. The printed
media
due to
the chart is not really used anymore.
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