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The graph bellow shows four categories of citrus fruits and top countries to which these were exported in thousand tones in 2012.

The graph bellow shows four categories of citrus fruits and top countries to which these were exported in thousand tones in 2012.
#bellow #four #categories #fruits #countries #were #thousand #tones
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tones
 of fruits
send
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sent
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 to different
nation
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nations
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 in 2012. Overview, with the
expectation's
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expectations
expectation
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 of lemon,
least
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the least
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 amount of fruit
was send
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was sent
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 to the United
States
 compared to other given
nation
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nations
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. As per the provided
informative
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information
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,
maximum
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the maximum
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tones
 of oranges
was
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were
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 exported to South Africa around 1thousand,
whereas
 almost half of it
send
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sent
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 to Egypt and
United
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the United
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States
. Interestingly, roughly 100 thousand
tones
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tonnes
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lemons
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of lemons
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carry
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are carried
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 to Argentines,
however
 almost double to the United
States
, surprisingly, approximately 3
time
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times
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 more than to Mexico in 2012. Moving towards
rest
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the rest
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 of the data, in 2012, grapefruits
was carry
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was carried
was carrying
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 to
turkey
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Turkey
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 which calculates 400
thousands
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thousand
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tones
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tonnes
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, 300
thousands
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thousand
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tones
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tonnes
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 to Mexico and 200
thousands
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thousand
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tones
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tonnes
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 to the United
States
. In constant, other
exported
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exports
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 to
mexico
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Mexico
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was
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were
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nearby
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nearly
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 500
thousands
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thousand
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tones
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tonnes
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 witnessed,
nonetheless
 slightly above that 1
thousands
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thousand
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 was noticed in the case of other exports into Egypt and
United
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the United
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States
 in 2012.
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