Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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a huge impact on our society, which is why some people argue that all college students must focus on the current issues that the world is facing nowadays.
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that, some still believe that everyone has a right to decide whatever they want.
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perspectives which can give a great view
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their prospective careers.
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with, many aspects of our daily basis are influenced by
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and
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such
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as health, transportation, artificial intelligence, and others.
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, all those aspects need extensive
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studies.
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look forward to candidates that
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knowledge
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specific studies concerning
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and
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, Health Workers with specialization
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Virology are needed during Covid-19;
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, it is undoubtedly really hard to find someone who is an expert on those
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especially in some developing countries. Another example
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security was a big issue in the
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decade since every country might attack others directly using the internet like artificial intelligence. Cyber security experts are needed to protect private data from spies or scammers.
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, Social
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and Humanities
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also
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have a huge role in developing cultures,
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, and literatures. Since culture is part of soft diplomacy for each country, we never imagine how the country could be without developing
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own cultures and
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. All aspects regarding cultures and
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will disappear one day because no one takes
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seriously.
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, Papua island has very huge communities living side by side covering nearly 300 local
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and a hundred tribes. Government should take
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to preserve every culture and should make an intensive policy to support culture and art so that people can learn how diverse living in
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world is.
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Social
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graduates are facing very good career prospects in the future, it doesn’t mean that the
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are neglected. In conclusion, I fully understand that every subject is important to develop our communities in the future. Concerning some people who neglected other
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, the government should take
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to provide job seekers
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lot of opportunities to gain.
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Make sure the introduction clearly outlines the points you'll discuss. While your introduction touches on both viewpoints, clarifying your own opinion from the start could enhance clarity.
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Develop each paragraph with a clear main idea, supported by specific examples or explanations. You've provided examples, but further elaboration on how these examples support your argument could strengthen your essay.
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Ensure transition words or phrases are used effectively to link ideas between sentences and paragraphs. You've used some transitions, but varied and strategic use could improve flow and coherence.
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While both sides of the argument are presented, make sure your conclusion clearly restates your viewpoint, summarizing how the discussion supports your stance. This reiteration could be more explicit in your essay.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • foster
  • engagement
  • excel
  • innovative contributions
  • diversity in research
  • well-rounded education
  • broad perspectives
  • critical thinking skills
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • forced academic paths
  • job-ready
  • skills shortages
  • tech-driven economy
  • employment rates
  • changing job market
  • utilitarian subjects
  • aptitudes
  • wasting talent
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