Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Science
and
technology
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a huge impact on our society, which is why some people argue that all college students must focus on the current issues that the world is facing nowadays.
Besides
that, some still believe that everyone has a right to decide whatever they want.
This
essay will elaborate
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perspectives which can give a great view
on
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their prospective careers.
To begin
with, many aspects of our daily basis are influenced by
science
and
technology
such
as health, transportation, artificial intelligence, and others.
For instance
, all those aspects need extensive
science
and
technology
studies.
On the other hand
, governments
also
look forward to candidates that
acquired
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knowledge
on
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specific studies concerning
science
and
technology
.
For example
, Health Workers with specialization
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Virology are needed during Covid-19;
however
, it is undoubtedly really hard to find someone who is an expert on those
subjects
especially in some developing countries. Another example
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security was a big issue in the
last
decade since every country might attack others directly using the internet like artificial intelligence. Cyber security experts are needed to protect private data from spies or scammers.
Conversely
, Social
Science
and Humanities
subjects
also
have a huge role in developing cultures,
languages
, and literatures. Since culture is part of soft diplomacy for each country, we never imagine how the country could be without developing
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own cultures and
languages
. All aspects regarding cultures and
languages
will disappear one day because no one takes
it
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them
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seriously.
For instance
, Papua island has very huge communities living side by side covering nearly 300 local
languages
and a hundred tribes. Government should take
actions
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to preserve every culture and should make an intensive policy to support culture and art so that people can learn how diverse living in
this
world is.
Although
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Social
science
graduates are facing very good career prospects in the future, it doesn’t mean that the
subjects
are neglected. In conclusion, I fully understand that every subject is important to develop our communities in the future. Concerning some people who neglected other
subjects
, the government should take
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to provide job seekers
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lot of opportunities to gain.
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Make sure the introduction clearly outlines the points you'll discuss. While your introduction touches on both viewpoints, clarifying your own opinion from the start could enhance clarity.
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Develop each paragraph with a clear main idea, supported by specific examples or explanations. You've provided examples, but further elaboration on how these examples support your argument could strengthen your essay.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure transition words or phrases are used effectively to link ideas between sentences and paragraphs. You've used some transitions, but varied and strategic use could improve flow and coherence.
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While both sides of the argument are presented, make sure your conclusion clearly restates your viewpoint, summarizing how the discussion supports your stance. This reiteration could be more explicit in your essay.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • foster
  • engagement
  • excel
  • innovative contributions
  • diversity in research
  • well-rounded education
  • broad perspectives
  • critical thinking skills
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • forced academic paths
  • job-ready
  • skills shortages
  • tech-driven economy
  • employment rates
  • changing job market
  • utilitarian subjects
  • aptitudes
  • wasting talent
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