Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Science
and technology
has
a huge impact on our society, which is why some people argue that all college students must focus on the current issues that the world is facing nowadays. Change the verb form
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Besides
that, some still believe that everyone has a right to decide whatever they want. This
essay will elaborate two
perspectives which can give a great view Change preposition
on two
on
their prospective careers.
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To begin
with, many aspects of our daily basis are influenced by science
and technology
such
as health, transportation, artificial intelligence, and others. For instance
, all those aspects need extensive science
and technology
studies. On the other hand
, governments also
look forward to candidates that acquired
knowledge Wrong verb form
acquire
on
specific studies concerning Change preposition
of
science
and technology
. For example
, Health Workers with specialization on
Virology are needed during Covid-19; Change preposition
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however
, it is undoubtedly really hard to find someone who is an expert on those subjects
especially in some developing countries. Another example,
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is, cyber
cyber
security was a big issue in the Correct determiner usage
that cyber
last
decade since every country might attack others directly using the internet like artificial intelligence. Cyber security experts are needed to protect private data from spies or scammers.
Conversely
, Social Science
and Humanities subjects
also
have a huge role in developing cultures, languages
, and literatures. Since culture is part of soft diplomacy for each country, we never imagine how the country could be without developing their
own cultures and Correct pronoun usage
its
languages
. All aspects regarding cultures and languages
will disappear one day because no one takes it
seriously. Correct pronoun usage
them
For instance
, Papua island has very huge communities living side by side covering nearly 300 local languages
and a hundred tribes. Government should take actions
to preserve every culture and should make an intensive policy to support culture and art so that people can learn how diverse living in Fix the agreement mistake
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this
world is. Although
,
Social Remove the comma
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science
graduates are facing very good career prospects in the future, it doesn’t mean that the subjects
are neglected.
In conclusion, I fully understand that every subject is important to develop our communities in the future. Concerning some people who neglected other subjects
, the government should take actions
to provide job seekersFix the agreement mistake
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a
lot of opportunities to gain.Add the preposition
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task achievement
Make sure the introduction clearly outlines the points you'll discuss. While your introduction touches on both viewpoints, clarifying your own opinion from the start could enhance clarity.
task achievement
Develop each paragraph with a clear main idea, supported by specific examples or explanations. You've provided examples, but further elaboration on how these examples support your argument could strengthen your essay.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure transition words or phrases are used effectively to link ideas between sentences and paragraphs. You've used some transitions, but varied and strategic use could improve flow and coherence.
task achievement
While both sides of the argument are presented, make sure your conclusion clearly restates your viewpoint, summarizing how the discussion supports your stance. This reiteration could be more explicit in your essay.
Your opinion
Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.
If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.
Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.
Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:
...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?